I Want You

Today is a day for you guys to help me. I need your thoughts, your advice and yes, even your criticism.

My book is now completing yet another edit. I have had a few beta-readers and close friends read it and they have given me generally positive feedback. They loved my quirky leading lady (are leading ladies always quirky?), adored my Turkish hottie, and were left wanting more (always a good sign). I intend to upload to Amazon shortly (but think of shortly as a fluid term as it’s taken me forever to get here).

So, first things first.

Book cover

Ta-daaa!

Here is the proposed cover of my very first (still not quite ready) novel, Salep and Ginger. Does my cover grab your attention? Would you buy my book based on the cover? What changes would you make? I personally don’t love the font and wonder if perhaps the cover is a little dark. Would love to hear your thoughts.

Book synopsis

This has been fudged together and will clearly need an overhaul but again to any of you who love a sexy, romance give me your feedback. Would you download this novel based on this synopsis or would you need a little more? What would you change?

“Ginger Knox thought she was living her best rom-com life. She had the job, the apartment in Notting Hill (adjacent), and an honest to God Hemsworth clone for a fiancé, but when she arrived home one surprisingly sunny February day to catch her fiancé with his pristine white boxers around his ankles and his personal assistant in their bed, the tenuous facade of her life dissolved in a split second.

Suddenly single, Ginger resolved to finally become the leading lady in her own love life. And that’s just what she planned to do, until her plans were once again thrown into disarray when her flight home for Christmas was grounded in Istanbul and she finds herself stranded with the man of her dreams. Of course, it’s the same man she had recently had a near one-night stand with – and who knew he was one of the most famous men in Turkey!

Between Sydney, London and Istanbul, Ginger was resigned to the fact that she may never get her Happily Ever After, but what about her Happily Right Now?”

Getting Jiggy With It

It’s time for the big question:

How much sex is too much sex? I mean is there are point that it just becomes x-rated and unreadable? I myself still remember the first time I read a book that was borderline pornographic and I was completely gob-smacked… but I kept right on reading it (and lurved it). Would you prefer the idea of romance or do you want to see Ginger and Aydin get down and dirty? And before you guys ask no I haven’t ever read the Grey books so I don’t really have a comparable in my head.

My beta-readers were of widely differing age groups and so my romps in the bedroom proved a little shocking to some. One beta-reader refused to finish it and although I can’t find her actual feed-back she did tell me that I would find myself in purgatory very, very soon. Thankfully most of the others have been a little more positive:

“Feeling a little heart palpitation myself.  Good writing!”

“Gotta say, my lady bits are a bit ready just like Ginny’s!  Time to stop editing and go find my hubby for a little snogging of our own!  This is the BEST reaction a reader can have – wanting more – and the characters aren’t even having intercourse yet!”

Here is a little snippet. I’ve chosen this one as its as close to PG-13 as I could find. Believe me when I say it does get much, much racier.

Was this really going to happen? In an alleyway? Like horny teenagers?

A moment later we were kissing again, exploring each other’s mouths with our tongues, the desire for more, overpowering my senses. I slid my hand across the front of Aydin’s jeans and felt his hardness react to my touch as he growled in frustration. My jacket was on the ground in seconds. He turned me around, and I felt him unzip my dress and slip it down my shoulders to my hips. I turned back to face him, and he caught his breath as he gazed at me standing there in my safe, pink, boring Primark bra. I swore at that moment I would never leave the house again unless I was attired in perfectly sexy underwear.

He plunged his hand down my bra to release my breasts. I moaned as he brushed his fingers against my taut nipple and I watched in awe as he bent his head and slowly took it into his mouth. My muscles tightened, and desire rushed through me, as his tongue flicked over my rosy bud, biting and tugging it gently. I squirmed against the dampness between my legs as Aydin alternated between my breasts, sucking and tonguing, biting each nipple softly or rolling them between his perfect fingers.

Yep, it appeared that we were really going to do this.

Hit me with your feedback. Hit me with your criticism. Hit me with any positive points.

Just hit me!

Oh and if there are any publisher’s out there who want to take a chance on little ol’ me also feel free to hit me up – BIG TIME!

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11 thoughts on “I Want You

  1. It’s good. I want him a bit more frustrated and her in control …. That’s just me. She’s brave, she’s doing this -girl needs to smack his backside and be deliciously aware of how LUCKY she is Mr. Boring boxers let it all out.

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  2. OK, my opinion.
    I like a bit of romance and sexiness in a book, though not necessarily totally graphic. I did not read 50 Shades of Grey in any shape, form or tonal colour . It simply did not appeal (under training fuddy duddy though I did find The Virgin Soldiers sex bits funny). I do like the pink Primark bra……… shades of Bridget Jones and her big knickers!
    I agree with you about the cover, a bit too dark, perhaps a bit too much blue, especially around the bottom of the graphic.
    Good luck!

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  3. You go girl. I agree with you on the font on the cover – I found it hard to read. Perhaps that’s just me. I would read your book because it’s by you but, for me, I’m over heavy romance. I prefer mystery.
    I hold you on a pedestal. You are so clever in your writing and I’m in awe of your skills.
    Go get ‘em! X

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  4. Jamey, While in Turkiye I have found myself stranded for reading material with several English comedy romances whose covers could have been created/drawn by this same artist. I now avoid any paperback with this “signature” cover. Almost as silly and mundane as the contents. There are so many beatiful Turkish men whose likeness could do better at leading a woman into this alley. And yes, a sex scene should leave a little more to imagination. Tongue probbing and nipple nibbling is a bit trite. Don’t we girls like things to start a bit more subtly than this. Carol K

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  5. Is the sex in it an intergal part of the story and not just filler? If the answer is yes, then don’t change it to try to please anyone. There are people who will love your novel — or not love it — because it either has too much or too little sex. But with 7.8 billion people in the world there have to be at least a few thousand who will like it as written. 🙂

    One of the hardest things for me to learn (and I have to admit, I’m still learning) is that it’s better to hear it from a beta reader first than a book critic after it’s published. It was the people who said, “This could be better,” that helped me grow as a writer.

    COVER: I liked the cover, a fun-loving woman with a mystery man coming toward her in the background. If that’s a full moon, it’s perfect. If it’s the sun, I’d want the colors to be lighter.

    In the synopsis, I liked the first paragraph (except that “surprisingly” didn’t seem necessary). Your first paragraph explains why she would want to get away. But I was thrown off by the second — especially the sentence, “Suddenly single, Ginger resolved to finally become the leading lady in her own love life.” Coming home to find that your entire relationship was a lie makes you want to escape to a place, ancient and exotic. You want to meet a handsome stranger, have a bit of fun, and move on to the next.

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    • Thank you darl. This is exactly the feedback Im after. I have spoken with the graphic designer and he is fiddling with the cover (a little). And yep its a sexy, holiday romance perfect to read while you are exploring Istanbul so the sexy bits are staying (they even make me blush)

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  6. Sorry, I’m a bit late to the party. . . but oh man, I love everything about this! Actually, I’m not super keen on the cover, it seems a bit young to me (a font change could definitely help with that). Love a dash of romance and sex. I think it’s about finding the balance, like you said. I actually just read a book where every time the romantic characters kissed the author then cut to later that night or the next day, and I found it so frustrating that I didn’t get to experience more of them! The snippet you included is really hot. I’d read this for sure! Well done!

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